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Post by ~*The Pride of Ireland*~ on Jul 31, 2007 14:04:09 GMT -5
Tactical Advantage and Now Its Personal. Comments, constructive criticisms, ways to improve, all are welcome in the house of Corp!
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Post by Possum Person GFX on Jul 31, 2007 16:23:23 GMT -5
its good bro. You need to be less wordy and less repeditive. So dont try and be really formal just enough so that it is entertaining. Too much of it gets boring. and the repetitive thing is that you use a lot of the same words in only 2 sentances. Instead of using Face twice to say what it looks like, instead just get rid of one face or use words like brow or lips to explain the emotion.
well thats my $0.02 cant wait to see you come christmas.
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Post by ~*The Pride of Ireland*~ on Aug 1, 2007 13:48:15 GMT -5
Yeah, i just had ALOT to say the first couple of roleplays, i will try to be more descriptive in the future. lol. Sean Misses Me?! Whoa....i mean....whoa. lol. 300 IS ON DVD! Get your Spartan butt down there and get it! lol.
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Post by Jordan "Bullet Proof" Glass on Aug 1, 2007 14:21:40 GMT -5
You're worrying me James. I'm afriad I may not be able to keep up with you.
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Post by ~*The Pride of Ireland*~ on Aug 1, 2007 14:22:49 GMT -5
hehe...i told you guys when i returned XVI would be my only online commitment. Dans gonna be kicking himself when he returns.
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Post by Possum Person GFX on Aug 1, 2007 15:49:50 GMT -5
I might just bring possum person to the ring again just to face you bro
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Post by ~*The Pride of Ireland*~ on Aug 1, 2007 15:55:46 GMT -5
love your sig by the way.
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Post by Possum Person GFX on Aug 2, 2007 2:35:54 GMT -5
heres yours btw  |
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Post by "The New Era Icon" David Calaz on Aug 2, 2007 4:55:17 GMT -5
Youve spelt Corporal wrong again  you missed out the P |
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Post by Possum Person GFX on Aug 2, 2007 13:09:50 GMT -5
... Fucking holy crap sucker mother fucking son of a purple monkey hippo bitch!
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Post by Possum Person GFX on Aug 2, 2007 13:20:59 GMT -5
fixed for the final time... hopefully
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Post by ~*The Pride of Ireland*~ on Aug 2, 2007 13:59:39 GMT -5
freakin sweet sig....why do you gotta be so awesome (possum) at GFX?
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Post by Possum Person GFX on Aug 2, 2007 14:20:26 GMT -5
its all thanx to my fans. lol.
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