recent roleplay feedback

["The" Kobra]

i was just reveiwing all of my XVI roleplays and i saw my first roleplays was...well frankly it sucked and then ofcourse i had family problems at that time which have since died down a smidge and before i came to XVI i was in a fed called DWA which was Diabolic Wrestling Association thanks to a friend who who is in xvi now but never comes in anymore. it was ran by the guy who got me into efeding not even 3 months ago and well i haven't seen him since that time. but i was hoping since i never actually ask what people think anymore of my rps (mainly because i used to everyday and people got annoyed). i know i have never really been in any efeding title matches but that makes since because i'm still a newbie as far as efeding experience goes. anyways i was just asking for everyones blunt and honest opinion(s) and also willing to accept any and all advice given.

["The New Era Icon" David Calaz]

Ive looked at a few of yours since you came back and I like em alot.

one thing is though maybe use different colours for speech and description. Just makes it easier to tell whats what.

[~*The Pride of Ireland*~]

my main piece of advice i can give you is to try to space out your roleplay into less crumpled paragraphs, makes it look neater and easier to read. Otherwise your efforts have earned you a match on Side Effect that i think your character would love! Check it out.